[fi-rg] Comments to our latest document
Thijs Metsch
Thijs.Metsch at Sun.COM
Thu Sep 18 03:57:39 CDT 2008
Hi,
Thx for your reply, I'll tune the text a little bit according to your
suggestions.
Have a good one,
-Thijs
On Sep 11, 2008, at 11:54 AM, Gian Luca Volpato wrote:
> Dear All,
>
> I have spent some time reading and reviewing our latest document
> "Requirements on operating Grids in Firewalled Environments". My
> opinion is that the outcome is very good and will represent a solid
> ground for the work to be done in the newly created FVGA group.
>
>
>
> Just some small remarks, mainly editorial issues that I prefer to
> discuss in our group rather than writing them in the OGF web form:
>
> - page 1: the numbers of the chapters is wrong. It goes from 1 to 4
> and then starts from 2 again.
>
> - page 2, section 1: why should the last paragraph ("Some
> application use ..." ) not be considered as a 4th category of grid
> applications, i.e. the category of the applications which use
> obscured dynamic ports?
>
> - page 4, section 2.1: here we reference a paper from the D-Grid
> project that is written in German. The paper itself is a good
> information source, but is it OK to provide reference written in a
> language other than English?
>
> - page 10, section 2.7: the paragraph after Figure 5 says that
> incoming SOAP messages are decrypted before entering the gateway
> system. Which component performs the decryption? How can this
> component access the key used for the message encryption?
>
> - page 11, section 2.7: is it possible to reformulate the 3 bullet
> points at the beginning of the page? The sentences within
> parentheses look like comments from the author. The message to be
> conveyed is clear, but it is expressed in a very short form.
>
> - page 15 and 16, Glossary: we provide explanations for 3 terms that
> are never used in the document: DWDM, GPFS and IPSec. Shouldn't we
> remove them?
>
>
>
> Kind regards
> /Gian Luca
>
>
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